Thursday, April 10, 2008
pause for eternity!
what is it about you
that makes me
swing across the spectrum thus?
sometimes i grin idiotically
and then sometimes i'm
working myself into a frenzy.
you seem within arm's reach
and yet the chasm seems
too wide for me to span.
and like a caged beast
i pace tirelessly, waiting,
for the gate to be opened
by you.
you clasp the key to freedom
tightly in your palm,
moist with the knowledge
of the power of the choice.
but you know better than to
unleash this caged beast.
and yet you move closer
inspite of yourself,
driven by the faith you harbour,
that the beast without is but
a reflection of the one within.
and by freeing one, the other
would lose its ferocity!
you take a deep breath,
reach out,
and then pause
for eternity....
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This was brilliantly written. So much intensity in your poems nowadays.
Loved the way you've written this *you clasp the key to freedom
tightly in your palm,
moist with the knowledge
of the power of the choice.
@prats : and that was the fastest comment i ever got :)
thanks!
hmm..strikes a chord somewhere..:) just a first timer's comments/thoughts.
hmm..struck a chord somewhere! :) just a first timer to ur blog dropping some comments...great intense stuff..
hmmm
//tightly in your palm,
moist with the knowledge
of the power of the choice.//
beautiful thoughts..
to have choices is a great blessing indeed
hmmm...another gem...with thoughts beautifully portrayed...
*moist with the knowledge
of the power of the choice.*
what a powerful line...!!!
the right choices and the quickest pauses...is that life?
Oh my God.
Speechless.
Loved it,loved it, loved it.
U do have a gift for poetry.
Hey GP!: )Some intense poetry happening here man!:):) Nice going:)
Am not much of a poetry person... but hey!
Beautifuuly written.
Your poems are becoming better and better day by day !! Have marked a few of them.
"you clasp the key to freedom
tightly in your palm,
moist with the knowledge
of the power of the choice."
Absolutely brilliant.
P.S.-I am back from my traveling, have been reading all your posts but couldn't come & comment.
hey ...the pause is getting eternal!!!!
@ ramblings : thanks for dropping by and for commenting. keep dropping in :)
@ gazal : sometimes we would rather not have the burden of choice, don't you think?
@ suma : thanks.... and the pause has ended. just drowning in work. i think it might be like this for sometime. am not able to catch up on your posts either... my loss :(
@ ps : thanks... your feedback is always special :)
@ziah : hey! glad you liked it... i'm not a poetry man myself... just a phase i guess :)
@ joy : thanks
@cuckoo : glad to see you back :)
i thought the cuckoo had flown the next once again!
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